Writing Center

This Wednesday, I went to the writing center for my paper. Ms. Swift told me a lot about how to change my paper to be better. I have so many mistakes should be fixed. Also, there are some advice she gave me that made me think a lot. I think those are very useful for my paper because it really make me feel very interesting. However, because there were too many people there at that time, I could not get all of them.

First, she told me there are some grammar mistakes I had. I knew that because I have a really poor English. And when I wrote my paper, I could not find my mistakes because that’s what I wrote. That’s one of the reasons I went to writing center. On the other hand, Ms. Swift told me I should change my introduction a little. As a result, the summary should be before the thesis. Then the summary won’t be too strange for the people after the thesis. In my first draft, I wrote too much about the summary. In my opinion, I wanted to summary what happened in the book and also in the movie. However, it didn’t work because that’s so boring in the article. In addition, people won’t spend so many time to read the summary about the book and the movie. In my body paragraph, I should also summary the story that I want to have analysis for, so the summary before the body paragraph is unnecessary.

Second, she told me I should think deeper for what the author wanted to say. For example, the name of movie is Frozen. Why it’s called Frozen? Just because Elsa has the magic? She thinks that also because Elsa closed her heart to make her frozen herself. When she knew the love between the family by Anna, she became warmer and knew how to help the people. The similarity between Me And You and Frozen is this I think. Because they both closed their heart and didn’t trust anyone in the beginning; then, when they met their sisters, they became warmer. I think that’s a good point to write this paper. Also, I want to think more about the deeper ideas for my paper. It is a good advice; I think I will think about it and make my paper to be deeper. Summary is a such boring things in one article. That will make reader don’t want to read it. For this reason, I will change my paper a lot to make it interesting.

In conclusion, I think she is really good at helping students about the writing. She gave me a lot of advice that I think is useful. In addition, she told us a book that is for how to write a good paper. I didn’t read that, but she told me some advantages to write a good paper. For example is to think deeper about the event which happened in the story. I think I should go again before the final draft.